wow, this was very well explained
I actually visualized it
Almost on par with Naz's stories
This sounds awfully familiar with something I read before...
Cool, but some slight errors. Crimson is a color, can either be used as noun or adjective, therefore it must be used to describe blood, and not to replace it. I'm not sure why you put 'stained' though. :o
Most of the sentences start with 'he'. You should change it up a little. Add some adverbs or something. :o 'Reaching for the knife..', 'Gently, he pricked...'
Other than that, good job. :o
The way he used it could be of artistic effect, though I would've said, "The crimson drops hit the vodka..." But Jon's way is good nonetheless.
-=The Nazgul=-
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